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Life

Like watching paint dry on a dirt wall

A plane at a 90 degree angle

Stall

Ring around the roses, pocket of cold steel

Fall

A raisin for a lung

A dying breath rising to the Sun

A little wisp of smoke on a rainy day

Just fade-

Away

Slipping into the deep

Give a squeeze

And just rock off to sleep


Sunlight spreading its warming fingers

Like a tuft of smoke

Linger

Dissipate into nothing

A breath of fresh air

Sniff, catch a whiff

Of a new beginning at its start

Emerging valiantly from the dark

A little poem about life, I feel that it is pretty straightforward but if you want me to explain things or want to speculate on things, feel free to do so.
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Reprogrammed Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Student Writer
This is just amazing. I really have no other words. You've left me speechless.
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IntricateSunlight Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks Willow. I really like this one too.
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StarryMary Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes it gets too tedious to wait any longer...
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IntricateSunlight Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know how you feel, but life in of itself has its own worth.
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EvelynTaliette Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student Writer
Hmm, I have to say that this was fairly interesting although I'm not a big fan of rhyming. Your imagery was certainly what caught me by the beginning, as there's multiple takes on everything-"Slipping into the deep\Give a squeeze\And just rock off to sleep" Someone taking their last breath, squeezing their lover's hand for the last time? Then, the poem slowly begins to grow from a dark, sudden ending to a hopeful beginning- the smoke dissipates in a new breeze.
Overall, very suiting of its title and a lovely little poem!
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IntricateSunlight Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the feedback! I was actually kind of apprehensive about uploading it because I felt that it wasn't...well very good but a friend convinced me otherwise.
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