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Periwinkles and black holes

Resting underneath suns as dark as coals

An arm signed by a razor

Caused by a heart covered in craters

A field of violet abyss

Swallowed by black amiss

This poem came from the top of my head quite a while ago, about maybe a month or two ago. Feel free to tell me what you think about and try to be constructive about it.
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paperheartsnreal1s Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
Very well thought out. I really like it :)
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IntricateSunlight Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I am glad that you liked it.
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paperheartsnreal1s Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome
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AyeAye12 Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
Intriguing and great!
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IntricateSunlight Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, nocturnal marsupial :D
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:iconhazardousdreamer:
Simple... Concise... Yet incredibly descriptive.
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IntricateSunlight Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I am often told that I am an extremely descriptive writer.
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:iconhazardousdreamer:
I would love for you to give me your thoughts on any of my writings. Please, be as critical as you like. I don't mind criticism...
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IntricateSunlight Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Alright, I might see what I can do :D
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PockyPockyX3 Sep 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Story of my life V..V
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